ABOUT
THE AUTHOR
What's to like bout me? [March 2002]
AUTHOR'S OTHER TITLES (1) Dinner Time (Poetry) pay attention to the clock. [215 words]
Thinking Of You Able Mine
this is a story
of a lifetime waiting
longing and lingering
grieving and craving
my history states to my presence
calls out and falls out
between the stillness and uncertainty
of my heart
i wanted to love you,i want to be loved
i wanted to stay,i want to be needed
i wanted to cry,i want to be held
hesitation
i wanted to stand here forever,i need light
i wanted to run after you,i need wind
i wanted to walk beside you,i need guide
i wanted to wake you up,i need hurricane
i wanted to cross the fine line,i need you
to catch me by
i'm overwhelmed
the wisdom had told
the greatest love stories ever
i overheard them
i misheard them
i overead them
i burned the books
i overlooked them
i closed my eyes
what is love if we stand the different ground
breathe the different air
differs by scent and scene
space and time
a different beat
i'm sober
every other day it hits me
every other night it breaks me
craving over the emptyness inside
the deepest hollow that echoes bittersweet choir of lullaby
breaking the silence
tearing the dull apart
speechless
i'm not die yet
READER'S REVIEWS (5) DISCLAIMER: STORYMANIA DOES NOT PROVIDE AND IS NOT RESPONSIBLE FOR REVIEWS. ALL REVIEWS ARE PROVIDED BY NON-ASSOCIATED VISITORS, REGARDLESS OF THE WAY THEY CALL THEMSELVES.
"pretty good1you sounds grieving!" -- lizzy brian, alabama.
"I'm not a great lover of poetry, I find it to vague I like characters and plot and stuff that I don't have to think about. I especially don't like angsty soppy poetry but there was something about this that's very touching. It speaks with the authority of an author who seems to have suffered, and it has a blunt honesty about it. I like the bit about burning the books. Sad poem. Oh and if you have the time please think about changing your author description it's so sad. I'm unattractive, but I can find plenty about myself that I like and that I hope other people can like. Everyone has lots of good stuff going on, if they want to find it." -- Sooz, Dalton, Cumbria, England.
"i love your poetry.a bittersweet one." -- karen, cali.
"Quit writing poetry like this so that people will feel pity for you! You sound like you're not really depressed, but you're trying to sound like it so people feel sorry for you. Don't just throw words together and believe that it's a poem. You must make art. That's poetry. And this sucks. " -- Buck-killer.
"it's interesting...i think it's really kind of bitter sweet and quite touching...makes you think about the mistakes you make and the potential you have to change your actions... just one note...you might want to change the last line to "dead" instead of "die"...other then that...great stuff" -- ashley, delaware.
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