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I couldn't get this Devil (a poet, no less!) out of my thoughts any other way but to write him out... I'm wondering if the repetitive whispering works in this poem? Let me know. It sounds good without all the repetitive whispering too... I'll change it according to review... [87 words]
ABOUT
THE AUTHOR
Haven't written in awhile, using this to express feelings and emotions on... hold. And for spur of the moments thoughts too. Note: Most of my writing is metaphorical! [November 2004]
AUTHOR'S OTHER TITLES (27) Anguish (Poetry) Found this poem recently. Wrote it in high school. My, was I a sad, sad girl. I remember those depressed days of blasting NIN while I contemplated death. Glad I'm over it. [93 words] Betrayed (Poetry) Friendship- some people don't know the meaning. Anyway- this one probably needs more work too, but ah well~ I'm mad and had to write it out... suggestions welcome. [101 words] Contemplating (Poetry) Wrote this after I wrote Illumination when the Damn Devil was still hunting me... not sure if it's done, but ah, well... [81 words] Craving (Poetry) I wrote this in about 5 minutes and it probably shows- but I was craving and had to write it out of my system. [34 words] [Erotic] Detroit Begging (Poetry) Ok - I was pretty annoyed this morning that I was asked for some change by this panhandler who would not give up. When I said no, he asked me to check my coat, or maybe go back to my car to see if the... [269 words] Exhausted (Poetry) Rainy days... are sometimes downright depressing. Where is the sunshine?!?! This is what came out of one of those sucky days... I think it needs work, suggestions are welcomed. [45 words] Exorcism (Poetry) For The Devil- I'm going back into the Light. I cannot stay in the dark- eternal damnation is just not my thing. [98 words] For The Devil (Poetry) - [118 words] Furious (Poetry) Still so angry at an ex-boyfriend that turned psycho stalker on me. He put me through hell, caused me to have to move, and made me guarded and distrustful of all men. I saw him this weekend and sparke... [151 words] Hangover (Poetry) This is for Andrea... (And maybe Wade too, since he supplied most of our drinks!) For our night of craziness at 5th Avenue and Sevin involving kissing girls (not by me!), getting kicked off of the sta... [139 words] [Humor] Haunted (Poetry) And still he whispers... as I try to hang on. Temptation... can sometimes get the best of you... but I'm trying not to give in. [118 words] His Shirt (Poetry) Funny how a piece of clothing can stir up moments in time... [102 words] Illumination (Poetry) Hmmm... Salvation was already taken... Ah, well... [119 words] Into The Darkness (Poetry) For The Devil. Thank you for corrupting my soul in the sweetest, slowest, and most gentle way possible. Damn you. =P [229 words] Jaded Eyes (Poetry) - [54 words] [Relationships] My Addiction (Poetry) I find myself addicted... [169 words] Prayer (Poetry) Trying to save myself... [195 words] Run Away (Poetry) I'm restless and have this insane need to get away from everyone and everything... maybe I just need a vacation? Anyway, I was just trying to write it out of my system. [87 words] Spoon (Poetry) This poem is for Jonathan- as requested (demanded?! J/K). My promise has been kept. This came out of a conversation on cuddling and how great cuddling is... and then I guess the Devil got in my head a... [45 words] [Erotic] Stolen Kiss (Poetry) Thinking about this and reliving a nice, stolen moment... [214 words] Submerge (Poetry) Started in October 2003 and decided to work on it again. Not much of a free verser... Changed the name from Drawn to Drown (not available, so changed to Submerge), makes more sense with the new lines.... [37 words] Suffocated (Poetry) Writing things out as usual... [72 words] [Relationships] Tease (Poetry) I was recently told that I'm a tease- I guess I kind of am because I've stayed single and abstinent for over a year now. But, isn't teasing the funnest part? ;) This was just something I had fun with.... [216 words] Unbound (Poetry) This is pretty short, but I don't know, it seems to say everything for me. This is for Jon. [16 words] Waste (Poetry) Saw a picture and got mad again. Hate having him in my thoughts, so, I tried to write him out. Shall I replace "goodness" with kindness, integrity or decency? Lemme' know, I'll change it according to ... [20 words] Welcome (Poetry) (Reposted) My muse endeavored to inspire... Jonathan, this is for you. Don't forget to leave your door unlocked. Welcome because you always say I am. Welcome because you won't accept my thanks. [98 words] [Erotic] Window (Poetry) Broken hearts... Seems to be what's most written about. Found this last night. Written 01/28/96 after a heartbreaking fight at 6am in the morning. I watched my first true love sit in his car and cry a... [140 words]
He Whispers Tessa
He whispers
The Devil knows my name
He whispers
Softly of love
He whispers
Offers me ecstasy, eternal release
He whispers
Seduces me with words, dark poetry
He whispers
Causes aches, burning desire
He whispers
Entices, arouses, crafting a fire
He whispers
For my soul, for my heart
He whispers
Of weakness, futile struggles
He whispers
Entranced with his spells
He whispers
Words like gentle kisses upon my neck
He whispers
Verses sensually caressing
He whispers
Lyrics burning, igniting my thirst
He whispers
Rhymes awaken my need
He whispers
Beckons me to come undone
He whispers
Urging release
He whispers
Inviting to darkness
He whispers
Turn from the light
He whispers
I am now his
He whispers
Eternally
READER'S REVIEWS (12) DISCLAIMER: STORYMANIA DOES NOT PROVIDE AND IS NOT RESPONSIBLE FOR REVIEWS. ALL REVIEWS ARE PROVIDED BY NON-ASSOCIATED VISITORS, REGARDLESS OF THE WAY THEY CALL THEMSELVES.
"I like it as it is but maybe you want to put another one up without. " -- Just A Guy.
"I was thinking the same... but I wonder if it will change the effect I was trying to get across of these feelings being "always on my mind"?!?!" -- Tessa.
"Well Tessa, if you have them both up people will tell what they think. Mostly good folks around here it seems." -- JAG.
"I thing one "He whispers" per line, rather than two. Doesn't change the seduction of it, but offers less repetition. Maybe "He whispers, whispers". I like it though." -- Sylvia.
"Thanks for the suggestion Sylvia! I think it flows better now!" -- Tessa.
"Any time. I like it better too. Glad I was able to help." -- Sylvia.
"I liked this a lot! Didnt see it in its original form, but I like it like this. I like the idea of someone whispering to your subconscience ;)" -- Michelle.
"Nice work again Tessa. You must have a good source of inspiration. I typically write without specific inspiration these days, but there are enough dark thoughts in my head to write for a very long time. Thanks for the reviews!" -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.
"My inspiration has got my creative juices flowing... " -- Tessa.
"I like these kind of whispers! Good stuff. By the way, if you liked my story, ''Pulp Affliction,'' check out my new one, ''Podunk.'' Doc" -- david ''doc'' byron, weirdsville, usa, ind.
"very sensual, i like it." -- August.
"i like it.its better then my peoms. i think my peoms are weird. lol but i guess its just cuz i made them. but yours are good mine are just about my life and depressen." -- angel tears, oklahoma, oklahoma city, USA.
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