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Emily's Love
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TITLE (EDIT)
Emily's Love |
DESCRIPTION
Nothing to say about this one.
[76 words] |
TITLE KEYWORD
Health |
AUTHOR
Kendall Wilt |
ABOUT
THE AUTHOR
The past is the past for as far as I can see
I dwell on the things that weren't meant to be
[December 2010] |
AUTHOR'S E-MAIL ADDRESS
blindthesystem@yahoo.com |
AUTHOR'S OTHER TITLES (51)
Almost (Poetry) Little limrick for ya. [63 words]
Blue Suede Shoes (Poetry) Who the hell wears blue suede shoes. [132 words] [Movies]
Broken Life (Poetry) Sadness. [109 words] [Drama]
Busback (Short Stories) A shocking tale of a special ed student with serious problems. In this story it's stand up for yourself or die! [4,823 words]
California Stop (Poetry) I wrote this on a napkin with jumbled up words like wiping up some sort of mental mess [69 words]
Characterazation Of A Barrel (Poetry) Defecative poetry visualizes what life could be like for a wine barrel, had it been a doctor. [241 words]
Colloquigasm (Poetry) Canned thoughts of powerful importance. [106 words]
Critical Situation (Poetry) All hope is lost, save yourselves. [118 words] [Biography]
Dead Hurricane (Poetry) Remember to stock plenty of water, canned goods, batteries, cards, beer and a dartboard. [97 words]
Dead Roses (Songs) A little diddy for an old girlfriend. [144 words]
Desire Of Her (Poetry) Loves elaborations continue. [76 words] [Drama]
Dog (Poetry) I cant belive my dog. Had to write a haiku to sort it all out. [15 words] [Humor]
Dream From Me (Poetry) I wrote this a while back but I dont know what I was thinking, I've never been married. [116 words] [Fantasy]
Drugs Are Bad (Poetry) "Kenku" activist style. [15 words] [Action]
Elusive Flounder (Poetry) Sometimes they're just hard to catch. [114 words] [History]
Enemy In Me (Poetry) I just can't seem to cut myself out of my life. Hiaku [Dark Humour] [11 words]
Friend Shithouse (Poetry) A revisit to a new classic. Perhaps I'll write a series. [84 words]
From Perpendicular To Semi-Circular (Poetry) What the hell are you to do when the road less traveled takes you to a dead end? Go back the way you came? Whatever, there are reasons people take the beaten path. [60 words] [Self-Help]
Great Place To Do Some Fishing (Poetry) You can't tell me your not interested in beer and fishin' [70 words] [Nature]
Happy Shithouse (Poetry) Seriously unserious poetry....This is definately the best I can do. [90 words]
Heroin Trip 1 (Short Stories) Young fella's life explodes after he couln't tell a dude not to smoke weed at work. 2 parts now just didn't want to change the title because it erases comments. [2,435 words] [Adventure]
Heroin Trip 2 (Short Stories) Added some more to this ongoing tale. It's all starting to build up to the grand finally now. [2,153 words] [Adventure]
Heroin Trip 3 (Short Stories) Well the first part of three anyway. I was just kidding about almost being finished. There is still a lot about to happen I'm just too lazy to write it out. [1,031 words] [Adventure]
Horror Haiku (Poetry) Oh how terrible. [13 words] [Horror]
I Confess (Utter Geniouslessness) (Poetry) Earth!!! Because there is no where else to go [101 words] [Popular Fiction]
Industrial Domicile (Poetry) Perhaps God has been trying to tell us something from the beginning. [67 words] [Architecture]
Irreality Showing (Poetry) To all the lazy, unmotivated, selfish existance individuals who let the world slip through the fingers of your hands by not giving a shit about the life around you instead of the one in front of you, ... [71 words]
I've Got The Blues Over You (Songs) Straight from whatever heart I have left. [195 words] [Erotic]
J.D. Therapy (Poetry) Stole this from a country song I wrote way back when. [89 words] [Relationships]
July In My Eye (Poetry) Sweet forth at the beach. [52 words]
Kiss My Bruises Baby (Short Stories) What you feel you need the most, may already be inside you. [1,963 words] [Popular Fiction]
Labor Day (Poetry) Senseless. [73 words]
Listerine My Dear (Poetry) Haiku for you. Please take action. [14 words] [Action]
Love From A Caged Bird (Poetry) Prison poetry. [158 words]
Moonlight Oceanside (Poetry) - [70 words]
My Fish Story (Poetry) Every fisherman has one. [155 words]
Parched Of Laughter (Poetry) This is a celebration of selective humour [73 words] [Business]
Perpetual Emotion (Poetry) An exaggerative exaggeration of how I feel about coloring in coloring books. [69 words]
Presidental Misconduct (Poetry) Another Haiku to throw in the stew.Just having a laugh at the world around us. Might as well. [18 words]
Sea Song (Poetry) Truth that life and love should not be intermingled. [129 words]
Shitfishin' (Poetry) What the hell. [52 words] [Humor]
Sinking Ship (Poetry) For ones who have second thoughts about living with lonliness. Revised. [81 words] [Self-Help]
Strangled By Sorrow (Poetry) Afterwork. [112 words] [Travel]
Super Shithouse (Poetry) This one is from the golden classic series. [78 words]
The Death Of My Descent (Poetry) Had to get you roses, chocolate and a poem because I couldn't afford a solid gold bar. [147 words]
The Pull (Poetry) I can feel myself growing older at a rapid pace....This is an expression of my feelings towards that [42 words]
Torn Apart While Sleeping (Poetry) Ever know of anyone to poke at a bear while it was asleep? [130 words]
Two Birds Of Paradise (Poetry) For the lovers. Fictional poetry. [73 words] [Animal]
What My Succubus Did For Me (Songs) Straight metal. It helps if you read this while your headbanging. [191 words] [Thriller]
When I Get Sad And Blue (Songs) A little twisted electronica. [77 words]
Xylocitin For Me Please (Poetry) This is what takes away all the pain......well not really. [69 words]
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Emily's Love
Kendall Wilt
What is the ocean
without it's moon
to pull and sway the tides.
when it's the whitest white
or black as night
it still shimmers on the rise.
the waves, it crashes over the rocks
and turns them into sand.
the flourish of life,
existance of all types
wouldn't be without a lunar hand.
the relationship of the moon and the sea
reminds me a little of you and me
dont let my waters go silent and calm
I guess I cant help that, your already gone
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READER'S REVIEWS (21)
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"The favourite poem that i have read of yours mate, keep it up. Peace." -- Hugh.
"Thank ya Hugh, much obliged. Sadley I hate this poem. It's like opening up an old can of worms but it did mean soooooo much at one time. Hey, have you read that fishin' one yet. That's where I hid all my gold." -- kwilt.
"How did I miss this one - BEAUTIFUL!! Nearly made me cry" -- Briony.
"Perfect!" -- me.
"nicely done, like how u dropped the last three lines in, cool." -- curious.
"Calling this Emily`s Love limits the poem as to its meaning, as the image used is abstract and poetic - you don`t let anyone add their own interpretation to your words. In fact, I`d consider revising the last four lines as they let down the poem in every sense, and give it a throwaway ending. The grammatical error in the last line doesn`t help either. And the double spacing makes it hard to read. Other than that, I thought that the first 11 lines created some real poetry." -- Peter Rivendell.
" She was the moon and I the ocean but I couldn't call the poem Moon love, because I was sending it to her. So I put her name on it. She didn't take me back though, maybe it was because of that damn grammatical error in the last line or the double spacing. Thanks for being critical. It really helps my writing" -- Kendall.
"Peter, Peter, Peter, if you were a clever boy you would spot two grammatical errors in the last - you're and can't but hey, who am I to criticise. The title gives it meaning and makes the ending more dramatic. You expect a poem of beauty and love and happiness and you have this until the closing lines. It is called 'DRAMATIC'. Kendall, do not change a thing. The ending is, like the rest perfect! Spelling and grammar be damned it's not like you're writing this for a spelling competition - I thank you!" -- me.
"Yeah, whatever. The ending tails off, it`s not dramatic. And spelling and grammar do matter, if you expect someone else to read and understand your work." -- Peter Rivendell.
"Thank you me, your awsome! Now Peter.....I did give you a good review one time. I remember, but your poem wasn't that good so for that I apologize for not giving you an honest critique. I lied to you about your poem and now you want to rant. If you spent as much time writing as you did reviewing maybe I would like something of yours. Sorry to let you down. Did I spell all of those words correctly." -- Kendall.
"How fantastic is this website? I thought the review section was somewhere we could exchange feedback on one another`s work. I made what I thought were constructive comments about a poem which I liked - Emily`s Love - and have now been subjected to 2 fairly personal "attacks". If you don`t want people to read or have an opinion about your work, then I suggest you don`t post it on the internet." -- Peter Rivendell.
"I`ve just re-read this thread. We seem to be winding each other up for no reason. Ok, I criticized your poem, but I did it because I liked it and actually had an opinion. You said you valued criticism and I knew you`d left a comment on one of my poems. Now, prompted by an anonymous agent provocateur, you`re slagging off my work and being sarcastic. What`s that all about? I want to be able to post reviews and get reviews - the rest is nonsense. " -- Peter Rivendell.
"I know, I meant to say If you spent less time writing reviews for my work, but I had already hit the button so it ended up in print. Oh well, just a crappy ole poem, I never did like this one after it didn't work for me, anyway. I aint going to spend anytime changing it. As for your work, I was just twisting your balls bro. If I gave you a good review, theres no changing that. That is the way I felt when I read it. I was just mad you were ranting." -- kendall.
"this would be a bunch more fun if it was 2 gals slugging it out. " -- curious.
"Amen to that Bro'. I've seen you have had your share of sluggin going on." -- kwilt.
"Peter - my attack was not personal it was pointing out that where you spotted one grammatical mistake I saw two - people read different things and I scanned the errors (which I'm sure Kendall spotted) to notice the beauty below. The ending is dramatic and having a 'throwaway ending' would spoil the beauty and the fact that the poem leaves you thinking about how broken the subject of the poem is, how the moon has left his ocean and lost forever. I think changing the ending would make it predictable whilst now it has an edge. The title also should remain...William Wordsworths most famous poem is entitled 'Daffodils' and is, suprisingly, about daffodils, closing the interpretation? Yes, I believe that was his intent and also Kendalls." -- me.
"Ehmm..m. Sehr gut Seite! Ich sage innig..!:) bmw" -- BMW, ..., ..., ....
"I agree BMW, This was a such a big deal made out of nothing. It's funny, I said that I had nothing to say about this one" -- kwilt.
"Wow, this is amazing! The last line is amazing it really got to me. Lovely poem" -- Tasha Jones.
"Thank you Tasha" -- kwilt.
"So meaningful and beautifully written -good peice that i enjoyed reading - never mind the minor mistakes. Everybody makes them - otherwise you are not human." -- AMY, Hayes, UK.
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© 2006 Kendall Wilt |
STORYMANIA PUBLICATION DATE
January 2006 |
NUMBER OF TIMES TITLE VIEWED
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