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TITLE (EDIT)
Lake Of The Woods |
DESCRIPTION
A story about man vs. nature. A young boy must face a bear in the middle of nowhere during a family trip in Canada.
[2,492 words] |
TITLE KEYWORD
Adventure |
AUTHOR
Stephanie Black |
ABOUT
THE AUTHOR
A 16 year old female. Goes to Hartford Union High school and enjoys writing.
[January 2003] |
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"Hello Stephanie, I wanted to go over this piece with you. It is an actual critique so do not become afraid or angry once you see its length or suggestions for improvement. The title drew me in and made me wonder what this Lake of the Woods was all about. You did a wonderful job, especially keeping some of the spelling errors to a bare minimum, but I wanted to go over the ones you did make so that you may correct them. Some words that work closely together are hyphenated to show their relationship with each other. Where you have the words (all together) you may wish to hyphenate. (It backed away and searched everywhere it could trying not to let the sound get to him.) In this sentence I think it would be appropriate for you to include the word ‘while’ between ‘could’ and ‘trying.’ As the sentence reads now, it sounds a bit wobbly. To understand what I mean it is perhaps best to break up the sentence into different parts. Most will sound right, such as ‘…backed away and…’ ‘…everywhere it could…’ and ‘…sound get to him.’ But as you will see ‘it could trying not to’ doesn’t quite work. I know what you mean by (unscared), but I’m afraid there is no such word. Try ‘not scared’ or ‘unafraid’. When you say (luke warm) try compounding it. Impressions: The story was captivating from the very first paragraphs. I enjoyed reading it, though I would have done some of the word ordering differently if I had been writing it such as (…the wet grass soaked the shoes of the three families…), but then again I didn’t write it, so it is purely up to the style of the author who has written it. I think this story would appeal mainly to a YA audience, and may have sales potential, if the author could come back to it perhaps at a later date with a bit more writing experience, especially concerning the particulars of foreshadowing (because when the story’s confilict isn’t presented immediately, good foreshadowing is necessary to come into play), and re-tweak it. Praise Where Praise is Due: The strengths of this piece lie within its steady flow, (there is no “and then ummm…” that you find in the work of many younger writers),and especially with its attention to detail, without becoming absorbed in detail that is unimportant to the story. There was believable conflict, and the lot was clear and believable. The setting was also well described. The people need some work, but there is no major flaws within the characterization, and the dialogue which they spoke is passable. In closing this story could in fact sell with some moderate retouches. " -- Karma.
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STORYMANIA PUBLICATION DATE
January 2003 |
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