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No Title Sake Man by Janette Dejesus . [4 words]
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The Adoption by Janette Dejesus About 2 girls who are adopted and one goes over the edge and commits a crime. [1 words]
The 9-11 Opportunity by Gregory Allen This idea was given to me by my boss. He is the star of the story. Fixed a couple of thing... [3,872 words]
Sally Part One by Gregory Allen Opening chapter in the adventures of Sally. [2,245 words]
Those Old Men by Charles F Kane A serious theme to ponder about, as we become may become the old men I describe in the first part... [424 words]
House Of Dolls by Lady Sashi When one of the X-Men dabbles in the Craft, the results are unforeseen. [3,148 words]
Alphabet by Tamsin Butler I was seeing if I can write a story starting from Z and working backwards. I am still working on it. [213 words]
Ocular Dolor by Ouazan G Skilad "Left?" "Right." "When?" "What?" Benny the doorkeeper in my building was almost completely deaf. [749 words]
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Memories Past by Alice W-M It's pretty self expanitery [453 words]
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Entity At Midnight by J Steven A man leavs work and is visited by something supernatural. [427 words]
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Red by Ouazan G Skilad A short story about a professional hitman who has been in the business one job too long. Please take the ti... [302 words]
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Quick And Dirty by Devin B Wieland Quick and Dirty follows the decline of a 25 yr. old man. In short, he believes that he must ret... [2,533 words]
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Five Dollars by Stevo Nagie A homeless man finds five dollars, has a small adventure, then loses the five dollars. [264 words]
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A Fallen Warrior by Byron Tuckett - [967 words]
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Have continued the story and would really appreciate any ideas :)
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AUTHOR
Tamsin Butler |
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[October 2009] |
AUTHOR'S OTHER TITLES (28)
Again (Short Stories) Very short story about death and beyond. Please let me know what you think. [1,328 words]
Alphabet (Short Stories) I was seeing if I can write a story starting from Z and working backwards. I am still working on it. [213 words]
Before I Go Mad (Non-Fiction) Im sorry, I just needed to write this somewhere to get it out of my head. [286 words]
Boozy Night (Songs) Based on Silent night just has new lyrics, was meant to be just a funny piece :) [94 words]
Call Girl. (Short Stories) Random story based around my job and my aspirations. [331 words]
Can He See Me? (Poetry) Did some stream of conciousness writing. I am not sure if the last line works so please let me know. [166 words]
Daddy Why Hasn't The World Stopped? (Poetry) - [43 words]
David (Poetry) It started as a poem about my memories and ended up just odd. Enjoy! [190 words]
Drunken Song (Songs) Jingle bells for the 21st Century, hopefully should be entretaining [113 words]
Glad (Poetry) Silly peom that will hopefully make you laugh. [27 words]
Hang Ups (Poetry) Everyone has hang ups about themselves. [190 words]
Heart (Poetry) Trying something new whilst re-editing my other works. [32 words]
Heart Hands (Poetry) Poem about being hurt and wanting to protect yourself. [88 words]
Interview With My Father (Novels) Interview I did with my father for university. Not sure if non fiction writing is a strong point with me. [1,465 words]
Its Not Fair (Poetry) How I feel. [20 words]
Left On The Shelf (Songs) First attempt at a very bad song which was sparked by my mum's comment. [193 words]
Leprchaun Ed (Non-Fiction) Yet another piece of work. This time about a bloke I fell in love with. Any reviews would be appreciated :) [1,552 words]
Life Repeats (Poetry) Tried my hardest to put all my feelings about a friend in a poem. Please tell me if it is rubbish :) [254 words]
Little Words (Poetry) I wanted to see if I could do a rhyming poem about life, would really appreciate any comments :) [256 words]
Midgets (Short Stories) Silly thing written about somthing my sister said [114 words]
Ode To Clyde (Poetry) For Clyde who thinks all women all moan about being dumped. [48 words]
Pathetic Phallacy (Poetry) Randomness in my head [184 words]
Sorry Sir (Poetry) Just how I feel most days in the job that I am in :) [117 words]
The Final Kiss (Poetry) Leaving the old behind. Was inspired by a friend who made a clean break which broke her heart. [118 words]
The Silent Thief (Poetry) Just ended a relationship so a bit devasted at the moment [232 words]
Tiny Tale (Short Stories) Updated version, have tried to write a story from a-z-a. [53 words]
Tree (Poetry) It's mainly about the loss of a friend, many years ago. [194 words]
Would You, Could You, Will You, Can You? (Poetry) Just a depressing poem written for valentines day. [182 words]
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"I like this, it has a nice description to it but I think you may be trying too hard at points." -- T B, Reading, UK.
"Thanks for that, and thanks to my sister for noticing the spelling mistakes, really appreciate it." -- Tamsin, Maidenhead, UK.
"Ha ha - yeah right you're grateful! When are we going to get some more? I'm dying to know what'll happen (still one piDgeon on there)" -- Tamsins sister.
"I like my pidgeons, ok so i can't spell. More will be coming shortly though :)" -- Tamsin, Maidenhead, UK.
"Tamsin Consider this as a better 'hook'. Your own words : "My mind makes all kinds of monsters appear." Now that might have kick started something if it appeared as the first line. Didn't like the tense you used. It slows down the pace. Also watch out for switching from 1st person to 2nd. Question now. Is the boyfriend real in the story or somebody to rant against? You need a top and a bottom to this story to make it work.Go for more action and less telling the reader about internal thoughts.Consider the reason to go by train. To meet whom? To arrive where? To carry what? Get rid of the screamer as it isn't necessary. Keep the mood and internal voice but shorter sharper paragraphs can introduce pace. Bad marks for use of 'just'.Two inches above a table is 'just'. It is 'just' and right an innocent man does not go to jail. Consider removing 'just.'Also 'suddenly.' Hope this helps a bit. Cleveland W. Gibson Author of Moondust www.LauraHird.com showcase" -- Cleveland W. Gibson, Faringdon, Oxon, England.
"Hey! I enjoyed reading your story. But, you can make it more enjoyable by improving your grammar. You might want to get your sister to be your editor to make you story or works more presentable. =]" -- Cherie, Yishun, Singapore.
"i loved this piece of work, it was a fast pace which kept me reading and i was dying to know what happened at the end. When i got there i ws like "Wow". I anticipate more now however and the only problem (or maybe not a problem) is where are you going to go from here? It will be a good write if you can pull it off but if you are hesitant leave it at that. However i suggest you have that as your introduction and then start chapter one like a couple of years earlier. " -- john, gloucester, gloucestershire, great britain.
"Thank you. I will get my sister to look at if she doesn't have better things to do, and I think i may need to continue it so thanks for the idea. I wasn't sure if the pace worked so thanks for the comment. ;)" -- Tamsin.
"I believe that the mask of the killer should look like Craig's face. I do not believe that he would actually kill her. He had already taken so much from her. He didn't need to kill her. It would be better if she lived on, her misery a testimony to his perceived superiority." -- Gregory Allen, Mpls, MN , USA.
"Thanks for the idea, there is more to come it's just taking me a while to write it. Thanks :)" -- Tamsin.
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STORYMANIA PUBLICATION DATE
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