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Don't mind this one because I just wanted to see if I could write a poem with three consecutive rhyming words.So the poem might seem a little forced.I've been reading a lot of poetry on this website and I've noticed that a lot of poets don't like to write in rhyme.That's not the case with me.I don't think I've ever written a poem that doesn't rhyme.I know it's weird but I can't write a poem unless it contains some type of rhyming form.Perhaps some of you can give me some advice on changing my writing style. [340 words]
ABOUT
THE AUTHOR
I am a retired New York City Corrections Officer that is currently attending Nassau Community College. I am studying creatve writing, and I hope to make my living as a writer now that I'm retired.I am 41 years old and currently divorced and living in Long Island. [April 2011]
AUTHOR'S OTHER TITLES (31) Apparently, I've Gone Insane (Poetry) Just a pleasant little poem that came to me one night while listening to the radio. [296 words] Brave Soldier (Poetry) A poem about love and war. [208 words] [Romance] Captain Courageous (Poetry) This poem is about my older brother who is a retired Captain of the NYC Correction Dept.This is not another Rikers Island experience.It's about a man with an addiction who found the courage to enter r... [597 words] [Spiritual] Day Of The Drunken One (Poetry) About 20 years ago I got engaged and my fiance and I threw ourselves a nice engagement party.I got totally wasted and made a complete asshole of myself.So I thought I'd write a poem about it. [424 words] [Relationships] Feel The Blade (Poetry) This poem is about a young girl named Lisa Fernandez. She was an inmate at Rikers Island hospital. She was hospitalized because she took a 'shank' and cut herself up. [330 words] Forever, I Will Always Love You (Poetry) This poem is dedicated to my partner in life,my best friend and the greatest woman I know, my wife Ann. [291 words] God's Hands (Poetry) Okay,I know I said I was going to write poetry that was more positive.But when I feel sad I write and this poem reflects that. [280 words] Happy Songs (Poetry) A poem about child abuse. [279 words] Hoping For A Resurrection (Poetry) Just a poem that came to me about relationships.It seems when I write about relationships I always write about saying goodbye.This one is about a broken hearted person that still has hope. [250 words] [Relationships] Hoping To Find Happiness Again (Poetry) Many years ago I was diagnosed with manic depression.These last couple of days I've been really feeling the effects of my illness.So I thought I'd write a poem about it. [543 words] [Psychology] I Wish The Darkness Would Disappear (Poetry) Just a poem that can to me one night when I couldn't sleep. [487 words] I'm Losing Control (Poetry) I spent many years suffering from the dark demons of depression.I wrote this poem during that time.Don't make me out to be a Devil worshipper or anything like that,it's just a poem that expresses the ... [245 words] [Horror] In My Mind (Poetry) This is a poem written by my 17 year-old niece,Andrea.Her grandpa passed away from cancer last November.She wrote this poem in memory of him and read it at his funeral.I was so moved by the poem that ... [375 words] [Spiritual] It Is Time To Say-Goodbye (Poetry) This is a poem about something we've all been through, breaking up with a loved one. [297 words] [Drama] Junkie (Poetry) Another Rikers Island experience.This poem is about an inmate named Robert Ramirez. He was carried to the clinic one night by the riot squad where they handcuffed him to a bed because he was violent a... [395 words] [Crime] My Brother Is Dead But I'm Doing Fine (Poetry) No need for words the poem speaks for itself. [375 words] [Psychology] My Daddy (Poetry) This is a poem by the love of my life, my 8 year old daughter Daniela Jane,she wants to be a poet just like her dad.The piece was written word for word the only thing I corrected was the spelling. [114 words] My Sad Little Boy (Poetry) A poem about the hardships of fatherhood and raising a son. [379 words] [Relationships] My Sweet Daniela Jane (Poetry) A poem about the love of my life, my 8 year old daughter. [149 words] One Heart (Poetry) I was taking a writing class at Nassau Community College and one of my class mates,a girl named Lenora,wrote an essay about how her heart belongs to Jesus.Her essay is what inspired me to write this p... [278 words] [Spiritual] Separate Ways (Poetry) Another poem about how hard relationships can be especially if you love someone and they don't love you back. [371 words] [Romance] Tales Of Tito: Essay Of An Inmate (Essays) Are you a fan of the movie,'Goodfellas?' Then check out this story about the life of a criminal named Tito. [2,718 words] [Crime] Temporarily Misplaced (Poetry) Felt like writing a blues rock song.If any of you rock musicians want to use my lyrics in a song, don't plagiarize me!Just leave me a message in the review section and I'll get in touch with you.Hopef... [480 words] The Game Of Life (Poetry) It took me a week to write this poem and I think it's one of my best.It's about the hardships of life,the difficult world we live in and the current events that surround us. [832 words] [Drama] The Light Of Tomorrow (Poetry) I think I'm going to go in a different path and start writing poetry that's more positive.Even though I suffer with depression does that mean every poem has to be sad? This one is a start on that new ... [162 words] [Motivational] The Mystery Of My Mind-Subtitle:The Things I've Tried (Poetry) I was just about to go to my son's baseball game when suddenly I stopped and sat down to write this poem.My wife thought I was crazy but what else can you do when you get an urge to write but write.Ne... [469 words] The Preacher And His Friend (Poetry) I truly feel that this is one of the best poems I've ever written because it tells a story as well.However, because the poem tells a story, the sentences are rather long. So I hope the structure of th... [319 words] [Drama] The Questions Of Love (Poetry) Questions we must all ask ourselves. [455 words] The Smoke Inside You (Poetry) A poem about the fears I have about my wife's pack a day cigarette habit. [231 words] Wighead (Poetry) I went bald at the age of 20 and it devastated me.Then I did a stupid thing and went out and bought a toupee.Yep,that's right, I was a wig wearer.It was the most horrible time of my life.Can you imagi... [543 words] [Comedy] Your Prison Cell (Poetry) Another Rikers Island experience.This poem is about an 19 year old inmate named Ralph Porter.I discovered him hanging in his prison cell one night while I was working the graveyard shift. [382 words] [Crime]
Unanswered Questions David Daniels
Lost in a world of illusion
Trapped in a cage of confusion
Suffering from psychotic delusions
Bounded tightly in chains
The people all call me insane
Hate and disgust is all that remains
Fall down into the realms of Hell
I can't scream,I can't yell
Going crazy in my prison cell
Left out in the freezing cold
There's no hope for me now,so I am told
My heart ages and grows old
Feel the flames of the fire
Take the drug and soar higher
No time for love or desire
Feel the sharp blade of the knife
A lonely husband sits without a wife
Now there is no meaning in his life
Are you disgusted by the choices you make?
Should you give before you take?
Is the laughter you hear totally fake?
Did you lose the power of your free will?
When you feel the pain,do you take the pill?
Are you the first in line after the kill?
Do you feel that life is to hard?
Has life dealt you the death card?
Do you fall to your knees and pray to God?
Are you capable of anything but hate?
Will you be denied entrance at Heavens gate?
Do you believe in the hand of fate?
Do you believe in Heaven after you die?
Can you feel happiness or do you sit and cry?
Does anyone have the answers or the reasons why?
Are you incapable of touch and can not feel?
Can you figure out if life is real?
Why is your heart so cold and made of steel?
When I look into your eyes I turn to stone
The look that you give me back chills my bones
Turn and walk away and just leave me alone
Can you breathe the coldness of the air?
I call for you but your not there
It doesn't matter for no one seems to care
Why are you wasting the minutes of the day?
Why is time slowly ticking away?
No need for words there's nothing left to say
I'm left standing alone in a pit of shame
I'm wondering who's left to blame
The wild tiger in me is untamed
Are you lost and lonely and without a fiend?
Is there some kind of signal you can send?
Why must all good things come to an end?
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"I think this piece is good. But you do not have to force rhymes, which I think this does. I have a hard time writing poems that do not rhyme also, but I think it flows better if you don't try so hard to make so many lines rhyme. BTW I really have enjoyed your posts. One question...are the names you use in your stories real or fictional? " -- mattie.
"Dear Mattie,I think I would like to leave the answer to that question a mystery.Tell me what you think and if you feel I should be using real names.Thanks for the review." -- David D.
"David...I wonder if using "real" names might be unethical, so I would not." -- mattie.
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