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Page one of a sci fi/fantasy/urban fantasy story (formerly called "e") I am working on for submission to a magazine. I absolutely refuse to say which magazine. [386 words]
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Where Chaos Reigns (Page Uno) Wolfa
One fine spring day when Amanda was six, she was left alone in the garden. Amanda had never been left alone before, but on that day there was an extraordinary set of coincidences. Her father was at work, her dog Boomer was at the vet’s recovering from a minor surgery. There was a problem with the house mechanical systems and technicians were inside fixing them, with her mother nervously supervising. The remotes were offline and not a single eye, organic or mechanic, was on Amanda.
She wandered around, acting out the stories she had made up in secret. She was a Catcher for a while, creeping through the tall forest of plants, hunting for deviants and smiting them mercilessly with a tree branch. When Amanda tired of smiting she became an Anarchist general from the old days and led armies against other generals. After a time, this, too, became boring, and Amanda returned to the sunny area of the garden to poke at the dirt with her tree branch. She was thinking about a video she had seen on small garden animals, and she was hoping to dig up something interesting.
As Amanda shoved plants aside with her branch, a ruby glint caught her eye and she froze. Curled up unobtrusively was a large scarlet and orange snake. One of its green-gold cat eyes was trained on her face.
Amanda and the snake stared at each other for one long minute before she carefully reached out with the stick, slid it under the snake’s belly, and lifted it up into the sun. Its scales flashed iridescent and its black tongue flicked in and out in her direction. It had a pattern of rings on its back and swirling spots on its sides.
Little girls do not play outside alone, Amanda thought suddenly. Little girls play board games with their friends. Little girls play games with _rules_.
She frowned and shook her head slightly to clear it of these strange thoughts. She was wondering where they had come from when the snake spoke.
“You are different,” it said coldly. “You are mine.”
And then there was no snake; there never had been. All Amanda could think about was getting some nice cold lemonade, and she ran inside, tossing the branch carelessly to the ground.
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"It was an interesting opening... though it's hard to judge the story with only the intro. I just had some minor suggestions: 1. I think a better first line would have been 'Amanda had never been left alone before' as it gives more intrigue. 2. The second sentence mentions the girl's name again; if you leave the format as it is, I think it should read as 'She...' rather than 'Amanda...' 3. There is a slight problem with punctuation in these series of sentences: 'Her father was at work, her dog Boomer was at the vet’s recovering from a minor surgery. There was a problem with the house mechanical systems and technicians were inside fixing them, with her mother nervously supervising.' For instance, 'Her father was at work' is a complete sentence so should either be punctuated with a period or a semi-colon. Thanks for letting me read it!" -- offpill.
"Oh my god! Something resembling an actual review, a second there I thought it was the Writer's BBS. Hi there I'm Rainbow Eater, good work here, just recently I became aware of the BBS from a girl named Michelle who was actually bad-mounthing it of all things, and learned that its really sweat, I also so your name there too so I decided to check out you're work at both. I've decided to swtitch form this sight to that one, because I know this BBS will help me so much in my spelling and grammar. I hope you agree and may even help me shold we enconter each other there. Hope to see you again." -- Rainbow Eater.
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